BADLAND - Oneshot

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It's a nice OS and good advertisement for the main work but damn Watagiri was quite the range of genre.
 

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This author has really good ideas, but are never explored fully.
 
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Underwhelming end. They open up to each other and then they both die. Would have been better if they had found a way to fix alicia and start a new life together somewhere. And her real name is Hana? Jeez... Only a Japanese person can be that corny.
 
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oof
I would like to see how android in the end made human escape and live.
 
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they don't. the bomb will go off when she dies and they're at gunpoint so it's assumed to have gone off on the final panel
 
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@Tenshi_A no, I mean it's clear that they both died. I even wrote "oof" as a reaction to that. I just said what I would like to see.
 
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*Plottwist

They were saved thanks to certain portal that appeared out of nowhere and both of them got transported to another world and both of them become an individual that were different from them in the previous world and right after they got transported, out of nowhere their race seems to be changed as an elf tho their faces were still the same. Ah and injuries also gone along with when their races changed and they make a living there...after sum certain events had been passed, both of them decided to going out together and married year later after got transported then both of them live happily after


-FIN-




HAPPY ENDING UNLOCKED
 
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Should've developed their 'relation' further rather than spending pages on the action scene (that's not really the focus of the oneshot at all). Also, the double "what a tweest!" was unnecessary and doesn't even make sense- how do you fake being made of metal and why would that extend your life at all?

Nice story concept, bad execution.
 

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