Jitsu wa Imouto deshita. ~Saikin Dekita Giri no Otouto no Kyorikan ga Yatara Chikai Wake~ - Vol. 5 Ch. 22

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Page 4, empty bubble in first panel. Second panel missing "you" in the "as long as do it" line.

Page 21 first panel has past tense switch to present issue. Stick with past tense "drifted", etc

Page 22, Akira's last bubble missing "a" in "Maybe finding place that"

Page 29, first panel missing "to" in "for you remain small"
 
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I feel like it would be a huge... with me, or rather, (adding either one or two commas)

page 13: last bubble, "... you called him back then"

page 29: "two years after that night" prob shouldn't have a period at the end, maybe an ellipsis?

why are the ellipses weird?
 
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Oh no, is the author gonna make the parents divorce just so the protags can get together? Please don't, that's just mean spirited to do to the parents in this story.
Plot twist, this is just the author trying to force the oyakodon ending that nobody asked for!

Jokes aside, probably some people did ask for such an ending tho...
 
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again with the "work before family" thing ? and nobody ever things "hey maybe this job is messing with my family" or "maybe i should get a better job". Nop is always work over everything else and authors never pointing directly to the Elephant in the room. it maybe be a cultural thing but at this point i just dont care if the parents get divorced, this is an avoidoble issue.
 
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again with the "work before family" thing ? and nobody ever things "hey maybe this job is messing with my family" or "maybe i should get a better job". Nop is always work over everything else and authors never pointing directly to the Elephant in the room. it maybe be a cultural thing but at this point i just dont care if the parents get divorced, this is an avoidoble issue.
You should care if it is a cultural thing, since it makes sense why you can’t just avoid issues that might happen at work even when you yourself are on vacation.

Just as in real life, it is not necessarily easy to just switch jobs, and depending on your position at the company you can’t go incognito during vacations. Also in Japan it is quite common for seniors to take responsibility if a junior employee makes mistakes.
 

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