Succubus to Hajimeru Shinkenkousai - Vol. 3 Ch. 12 - How do you kiss someone?

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@dasdafd typos:
Page 2: my bathes -> my baths
Page 21: Crossbar I

As for suggestions, generally you want the text in a bubble to look roughly like an oval if possible, which means the lines in the middle should usually be the longest, and the widths of the lines should change gradually
A (non-exhaustive) list of where this can be applied (underlined words should be on the same line):
Page 2: And it's not like...
Page 3: Today is the...
Page 5: I want to go to...
Page 11: What is this...
Page 24: ...outside of her...
 
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@dasdafd typos:
Page 2: my bathes -> my baths
Page 21: Crossbar I

As for suggestions, generally you want the text in a bubble to look roughly like an oval if possible, which means the lines in the middle should usually be the longest, and the widths of the lines should change gradually
A (non-exhaustive) list of where this can be applied (underlined words should be on the same line):
Page 2: And it's not like...
Page 3: Today is the...
Page 5: I want to go to...
Page 11: What is this...
Page 24: ...outside of her...
ok i fixed the typos and the suggestions will be considered in the future.
 
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I find it absolutely hilarious that he's the one falling this hard. Bro is trying to convince himself not to go any further than a kiss but keeps getting assaulted by how cute she is. Fair, man, I get it.

As always, thanks for the chapter!
 
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Please don't hurt kokoro succubus-chan, she's too good to feel friend betrayal heartbreak :meguuusad:
 

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