I'm glad for you as well, you managed to create entire nothing post without even trying to give why the sentence structure would be better with your version. Feel free to jack off to your keyboard victory old man.
I simply have no chill when someone tries to force elementary mistakes as correct, and it takes a lot to annoy me to this degree.
If there were mistakes, they'd include last panel on page 9, where you forgot apostrophe in "Don't be embarassed" and page 10 upper left pannel should be "I'll make...
Bro, ain't no fucking way you're trying to tell someone about elementary mistakes when commiting them yourself. English isn't even my first language and I can clearly see your usage of "your" and "you're" is fucking wrong.
TL used "your" correctly, as char is saying about saving "someone's"...
Birdbrain.... Because the first one totaly did not imply "I can ruin you every day", while couple pages later it was more akin to "OK, you said your piece, who the fuck are you to interfere with our family matters?"
I kind of expected Hayamin in Phillia's role, but I'd argue Ishikawa is queen of kuuderes and emotionless characters. Good to know it's getting anime adaptation.