Yes, I know that I'm not the most qualified person to do the translation. Anyway, I’d like to keep trying, so thank you very much for taking the time to make all those corrections.
Your criticism is pretty harsh, but I want it so that I can improve.
I will continue translating the rest of the...
Yes, you're right. I realised that the main problem was that I had translated it too literally.
However, I would still like to finish translating the chapter and correct this section, so thank you for your comment.