For those wondering how it's cringe, that's kinda the thing. The joke is how cringe she looks for her age. A woman in her 40's going all in on dressing like she's in her 20's, like she's having a midlife crisis, is cringe in Japan.
I'm the PR, could you please point out which pages it is? I could've missed something
Edit: I did find the one on page 2. We're -> we've.
Edit 2: I have found a number of others. I think what happened was I skipped over them by mistake since the brain can fix that kind of thing. I probably...
Exactly. Honestly, I thought the former approach was better seeing as this is from her perspective. I think it gets just how confused she is across to the reader better.
He was banned from the forums for his critiques. But he asked me, I'm his PR for a group called Tulip of the Moon, to act as a go between for your conversations.
He wanted me to relay this to you:
You are absolutely right. I wasn't 100% on that line from the start, but seeing your comment made...
Looks like Conia's dialogue was changed, especially page 3. I'm not even sure what the hell Henlo was before, maybe it was a typo for hello? But it's replaced by hey now.
This seems to have a good concept, but bad execution. Though it might turn out better later on.
@Kynnath Just quit you're complaining, with how this story is going already I doubt the author could make that interesting. It would just turn into everything just so happening to fall into the MC's...