Eh. You could tell it was MTLed, it was stilted at some points and some of the word choices felt off but it was better that some MTLs I've read and it got better over the chapter. Keep improving and it'll be fine.
As an example the word you tled as game *or contest feels like it should be duel...
Xenophobic is fear of different intelligence species. Fear and hate aren't the same emotions but it is kina close enough that people would get what you mean