Zutto Seishun Poi desu yo - Ch. 6

[MangaDex]

 

[napaextra]

Sorry for the late upload

Btw give some suggestions for the fonts

 

[Doomroar]

She may be getting cute mogged by a boy, she may be getting sexy mogged by her own best friend, but she is still best girl

She is SSR+ in my heart! (too flat for UR, i can't lie to myself, lets face it XD)

 

[Cleant]

Feels like this chapter translation quality is better then the last one's, easier to understand what characters are talking about

 

[napaextra]

Feels like this chapter translation quality is better then the last one's, easier to understand what characters are talking about

thank u

 

[voliol]

AnonBlack wrote a good guide on typesetting.

Overall this is an improvement over the last chapter, and looking forwards to the next one.

Here are some notes, stuff that stood out to me as a reader:

• On p. 5, who is the "you" the girl with braids is referring to? Nyako? She hasn't spoken this page though, so it feels off.
• On p. 6, what's a minor? It isn't explained by the rest of the chapter. Yamada's apology also flows weird, though I can't come up with a concrete improvement myself ^^.
• On p. 9, the sub-chapter finish text is untranslated.
• On p. 10, would be nice to be able to read the concepts other than "sexy".
• On p. 11, there is more untranslated text. This is probably more important though, since it's in the foreground.
• On p. 12, "was hallucination?" -> "a hallucination?"
• On p. 13, Yamada's first "The world is..." should probably match his next mention of the world. So it can be shortened to just "The world...". (Or "the world does...", but that sounds clumsier to me.) Alternatively the big poetic sentence could be changed. "The world is yet unaware of the sparkle". Also it should match the sub-chapter title, also seen on the same page. Currently the wording is slightly different.
• On p. 17, it would be nice to read the text outside of the bubbles. The translation can be put in the gutters if you don't want to clean, though I don't necessarily recommend this.

 

[napaextra]

AnonBlack wrote a good guide on typesetting.

Overall this is an improvement over the last chapter, and looking forwards to the next one.

Here are some notes, stuff that stood out to me as a reader:

• On p. 5, who is the "you" the girl with braids is referring to? Nyako? She hasn't spoken this page though, so it feels off.
• On p. 6, what's a minor? It isn't explained by the rest of the chapter. Yamada's apology also flows weird, though I can't come up with a concrete improvement myself ^^.
• On p. 9, the sub-chapter finish text is untranslated.
• On p. 10, would be nice to be able to read the concepts other than "sexy".
• On p. 11, there is more untranslated text. This is probably more important though, since it's in the foreground.
• On p. 12, "was hallucination?" -> "a hallucination?"
• On p. 13, Yamada's first "The world is..." should probably match his next mention of the world. So it can be shortened to just "The world...". (Or "the world does...", but that sounds clumsier to me.) Alternatively the big poetic sentence could be changed. "The world is yet unaware of the sparkle". Also it should match the sub-chapter title, also seen on the same page. Currently the wording is slightly different.
• On p. 17, it would be nice to read the text outside of the bubbles. The translation can be put in the gutters if you don't want to clean, though I don't necessarily recommend this.

Thanks for the review you helping a lot im still new I will have a proofreader from next chapter I hope it will get better T_T

 

[Floriano]

Thanks for the review you helping a lot im still new I will have a proofreader from next chapter I hope it will get better T_T

Could I convince you to give it a review to the previous chapter? After you feel a bit more comfortable with this work. This one is understandable and I really have no problem getting the meaning of the conversations, last one I just have no clue.