Interesting first chap, but I think it needed a bit more context for an intro, so that we could get a feel for what the author was trying to portray in the story that is to come.
At least you are aware that people can see and interact with your posts here. There's always someone who thinks this is kind of a private post
Honestly surprised anyone saw this, even moreso that multiple people did. The difference between here an Anilist is crazy