This manga is sort of like cotton candy, every bite just sort of disappears in your mouth and that can be enjoyable to some, but you shouldn't expect anything more. Still an enjoyable treat if you're ok with that.
I think I've had my fill and perhaps want more than its able to give.
I think you did a decent job, but be careful about the unwritten etiquette. Commenters can be feisty to put it lightly.
You did a good job translating, no problems with grammar and mostly flowed nicely.
I'm not seeing much hope for this series. Its got all the tropes, slaves, evil religion, demis on the backfoot, getting along with random creatures, and having equipment he shouldn't have, breakneck pacing, etc. The synopsis feels like a lie so far.