Idk man, if they have the galls to ask for donations / ask people to go to their sites (so they can get ad revenue), they're expecting to be paid for this absolute minimum effort mess... They deserve the diss.
Different romanized names between groups and weird wordings aside, the pronouns are absolutely a mess... Calling female characters "he" and "him", switching between "you", "they", and "them"... It feels almost like machine translation.
Wow, been a long while since I've read a story that was so abysmally bad. The flow is all over the place. It feels like someone tried to force a crumpled dictionary into a blender and made an AI bought from the dollar store arrange the mess, then call it a story.