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Wow this is way more realistic than most hero abandoned mangas, he was the one who fucked up his life
 
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>Page 4
God DAMN.

@Wei_S
you have a lot of weird sentences. Like page 26
"There will probably a new hero to show up"
I think I get it but it is still structurally fucky.
 
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Also yeah, I can see how each of those articles can be misconstrued. 6 people attacked him and he put all of them in the hospital with him unscathed and they claim to be ordinary people.

It would help a lot if the sentences were better constructed. Some of them just make no sense at all because the words are out of order.
 
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It would be even more enjoyable if the sentences were a bit more, uh, polished
 
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@Wei_S I'm guessing English isn't your first language. That's okay, what you have is readable even if the grammar's a bit wonky, and at least you're actually trying to pull attention to this series so someone who you think can do a better job might decide to pick it up.
 
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We need a spin off just with secretary-san pics. No need for dialogue or story.
 
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demon lord's a guy right? shouldn't the tag be crossdressing and not loli?
 
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@lycho28
Doesn't say that s/he gonna come back with a same gender. Also, the demons didn't really think about those thing anyway, atleast according to the dialogue there.
 

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