Act Like a Boss Monster, Mr. Swallow!
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I keep trying to read this. The premise is something I should like.
Boss who destroys towns because they interrupted his nap? Check
The world thinks they are the be all evil when if they just left them alone nothing would happen? Check
Actually alien and eldritch boss that lives up to the hype? Check
Loving dungeon environment that outsiders find horrifying? Check
There is something broken about this story. It flits between serious and goofy, teen romance drama and international politics at the drop of a hat.
The writer needs to pick horror with a dash of comedy or comedy with a dash of horror. There is a balance that could be reached here. Horror and comedy are sister genres after all, but this isn't it. Hell, the teen romance bullshit in the first 20 chapters made me stop reading for a month. Now we are seeing signs of inter dungeon warfare mixed in with national conflicts and conspiracies AND a teen love triangle and I just can't anymore.
They "defend" the human town in their territory. At no point is it ever explained why. That's a fundamental missing piece of the story. Without that piece nothing makes sense. If the town was gone, there would be no convenient location for dungeon raiders to rest and restock, forcing them to travel for longer through hostile territory and therefore decreasing the number of raiders that even make it to the dungeon. Why did they not only defend the town, but are hellbent on making sure it says part of the empire, with all the support that implies.
Why did they spread the story about their dungeon specifically to bring people in to raid it? Especially since the boss is lazy and doesn't want visitors, but is guarding what is starting to look like some variety of world crystal. You know the thing that destroys the world if it's broken?
It feels like entire chapters are missing here. Especially the first one. We needed more of the early day to day dungeon life no matter what direction the story goes. More world building as well.
I wanted to like this. I really did. The panels of Swallow just unable to hold human form are fantastic. But not even amazing art can paper over this plot.
Boss who destroys towns because they interrupted his nap? Check
The world thinks they are the be all evil when if they just left them alone nothing would happen? Check
Actually alien and eldritch boss that lives up to the hype? Check
Loving dungeon environment that outsiders find horrifying? Check
There is something broken about this story. It flits between serious and goofy, teen romance drama and international politics at the drop of a hat.
The writer needs to pick horror with a dash of comedy or comedy with a dash of horror. There is a balance that could be reached here. Horror and comedy are sister genres after all, but this isn't it. Hell, the teen romance bullshit in the first 20 chapters made me stop reading for a month. Now we are seeing signs of inter dungeon warfare mixed in with national conflicts and conspiracies AND a teen love triangle and I just can't anymore.
They "defend" the human town in their territory. At no point is it ever explained why. That's a fundamental missing piece of the story. Without that piece nothing makes sense. If the town was gone, there would be no convenient location for dungeon raiders to rest and restock, forcing them to travel for longer through hostile territory and therefore decreasing the number of raiders that even make it to the dungeon. Why did they not only defend the town, but are hellbent on making sure it says part of the empire, with all the support that implies.
Why did they spread the story about their dungeon specifically to bring people in to raid it? Especially since the boss is lazy and doesn't want visitors, but is guarding what is starting to look like some variety of world crystal. You know the thing that destroys the world if it's broken?
It feels like entire chapters are missing here. Especially the first one. We needed more of the early day to day dungeon life no matter what direction the story goes. More world building as well.
I wanted to like this. I really did. The panels of Swallow just unable to hold human form are fantastic. But not even amazing art can paper over this plot.
