Azur Lane 4-koma: Slow Ahead! - Ch. 123 - Joffre

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Small correction/suggestion for page 3.
Panel 1, speech box 2 reads: "The clothes that I have earlier got wet so I changed into this one." Which I believe is strangely worded. My explanations and suggested changes follow:
  • For one, clothes are plural so it should end with "-into these ones." Alternatively, to keep the ending the same, 'clothes' can be replaced with 'outfit' to get: "the outfit that I [...] this one".
  • Secondly, "that I have earlier" is a weird way to phrase the sentiment and not very grammatical. I'd recommend switching to "...that I had on..." or "...that I was wearing...", both of which sound a lot more like something a regular English speaker would say.

These changes would result in something along these lines: "The outfit I wore earlier got wet, so I changed into this one." which I believe reads much better.
 
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