Thank you for the translation!
I know you mentioned leaving some info out of the notes at the end, but you can always add a second end page. I'd rather you write everything you want to, rather than feeling limited. I especially like your translations because you compare the WN to the manga; it is always appreciated, thank you.
I try to keep it to a page so I don't end up overdoing it.
If you were wondering about what I left out:
Aldi managed to avoid Jirei's payback for the kidnapping by running off to do errands as soon as the fights were done. Leaving Jirei to brainstorm ways to get his revenge.
Eve and Rafine spend more time arguing about which one of the two is Jirei's wife. Leading Jirei to worry that Eve might escalate things by clinging to him all the time, even when he goes to the bathroom. While Jirei did think about answering their feelings, it's not stated if he would accept or reject them.
Jirei does find Reti's expression at her invitation being rejected to be Cute. While thinking about Char, he does make it clear that he views her as a little sister.
Reti received a parade when she entered the country. With lots of businesses offering their services to her. People around wondered if Jirei was part of the hero party at first, but became more hostile to him after learning that he wasn't. They saw him as a stranger who had slipped into Reti's party.
He did rethink about his approach of getting into the library the official way, but decided that since he snuck in last time, he might as well do it properly this time.
Seems like the author wanted to flesh out Lucas with the added scenes. His personality isn't very different in the WN; he still comes off as an ass. Though I don't hate him as others seem to. While he is a jerk,
he is nowhere near as bad as the two others later.