Extraordinary Hearts

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I'm gonna level with ya mate, I've seen furry vore comics with better story and art. I kinda get the feeling these were made more for self insertion into manga storylines as opposed to wanting to tell a story.
 
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Why is there so much blank space between panels?

Why are so many panels the same one but with small changes?

I really suggest you work on improving your drawing too, everything looks extremely simple, not in a charming stylish way, just in an amateur one. Also, holy shit, you're telling me that the protagonist has been living with this girl for his entire teenage years and NOW he has a crush on her? I wouldn't even call this a late bloomer, it's more like his hormones were in coma during the entire timeskip.
 
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Nietzsche once said "Nothing is beautiful, only man: on this piece of naivete rests all aesthetics, it is the first truth of aesthetics. Let us immediately add its second: nothing is ugly but degenerate man - the domain of aesthetic judgment is therewith defined."

I'm sure you'd understand this if your wife knew how to draw a man, or a woman, or even a straight line. You two have committed a great sin by letting this degenerate man out from the sex dungeon that his Yandere Neko Girlfriend kept him in. I hope when you die, the film of your life is played backed in your post-it paneling, so you may glimpse the what's like to read a comic in the style of a CVS receipt.

The only thing flatter than the character art, is the character's themselves. To call them two dimensional is an insult to squares everywhere. How an actual human being, complex and intricate through years of life experience, is able to not only self insert but also create cardboard cutouts of tropes. Your work is merely a masquerade of cliches except I'm not having fun at it. The relationships are written as if you stumbled upon a collection of Harlequin novels and then took inspiration from the dialogue. This wishy-washy dribble is alive with the spirit of childhood innocence raped by its kinda skeevy but well meaning uncle.

Not to mention, the speed at which you release and drop your works is equivalent to the time it takes a young black man with skittles to get shot by the police. Your lack of conviction to a concept astounds even me, a man who builds half a house in Minecraft and gives up because I saw something shiny. Yet you insist on defending the stories which you have long abandoned like a puppy left under overpass, maggot infested and mange ridden.

These comics break all the rules, not only of the site but of literature and art itself. Please for the love of every god in the heavens above. Stop.
 
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Irrespective of the quality, I think it's sweet you decided to share your hobby with your partner and embark on a project together. Unlike what many think, art takes a lot of time and practice to evolve. This is especially true for someone who didn't have a frame of reference or a mentor to guide them. If you check the first submissions of some of the most popular Pixiv, Deviantart and Artstation users, you'd find that they are even more rough around the edges. While Mangadex might not be the most suitable place to share them, I hope you don't become discouraged by the negativity and keep doing what you love. I highly recommend Making Comics by Scott McCloud, How to Draw Manga by Society for the Study of Manga Technique. Also check Houtengeki's How to Draw a (Slightly) Sexy Girl: https://mangadex.org/title/37173
 
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not as bad as people say it is (i’m not revealing how much better by tho.) but if you’re gonna start putting these on the internet this early into your career please be ready to expect this kind of feedback. everybody starts off rough and you’re no different. buckle up because the road to any form of artistry is gonna be rough.
 

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