why the time limit? why cancel the whole marriage if Seyun fails to meet her deadline? why threaten her with her whole family as leverage? why is she seeing this solely as an opportunity to take advantage of Seyun instead of potentially building a relationship? why the bait and switch from a favour she could grant to a brutally harsh contract?
and then Woojin instantly offers to help and she says she would have felt to guilty to accept his help and like, why is that a problem? compared to the other offer that's considerably better, like you don't have to just blindly accept his help with no strings attached, you can negotiate and set your own terms and be very clear that your relationship should be seperate from business, set some boundries, open up and explain why just blindly accepting presents and favours feels bad, open up about why you feel guilty instead of just feeling guilty and he has no idea you're suffering from kindness
ugh, I've barely scratched the surface, honestly, at least spend another chapter or two building this up instead of instantly pulling the trigger and leaving all these holes everywhere