Nice of you to continue the series so diligently. I really appreciate it. Some critisism;
-you need better use of punctuations and similar at the end of sentences.
-the d in self-defense is missing on page 8.
-a question: on page 10, Kageyama is referred to as "this person", along with extensive use of they pronouns, was that in the raw or was it a personal deciscion? Because it reads really weird, Kageyama is just one man after all.
-on page 36, the sentence of "Hiruko is far more" is cut off. Far more what? Did you miss a symbol or something?