For an edited mtl, it's understandable and nothing in the dialogue that doesn't make any sense.
And tbh, i don't really care that much about sfx redrawing, etc from a manga. As long as the dialogue, monologue, etc, basically the most important thing from the manga, which is the story is readable enough. It's a 10/10 from me. So ty for the chapter and you did your job well done