I applaud the lyricism of the translation. Whatever post-MTL you're doing, it's working
It would be interesting to see the ML as aromantic rather than a man waiting for the "right" woman to arrive, but given the genre I'm not holding my breath. For half a second there when he said "I don't see you as the opposite sex" I thought "oh, so that's how he swings eh?
" but alas, genre conventions intervened. Sword-kun can definitely fix him though