Saikyou wa Inaka Nouka no Ossan Deshita ~Saikou Rank no Dragon o Kujo Shita Kekka, Jitsuryoku ga Sekai ni Baremashita~ - Ch. 1.2

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Thanks c:

I was hoping he would be further away and it would take a few chapters to find him. This is ok too :nyoron:
 
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It feels very rushed and cliche. There's no introductions for any characters besides the MC, the evil guild leader, and the waifu. I know you're supposed to show and not tell, but having a character who only exists to spout 2 lines and send a girl after the MC is just bad writing. You could've at least established her personality and their relationship before even if it is incredibly easy to deduce.
 
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Pretty good job on the translation. Just remember to be careful about forgetting to sub out the spanish.
 
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??? Goshu i know you said you need a sword to defeat it but honestly you looked pretty fine without it there lol
 
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So Stalker-chan's name is Mizury? Like Stephen King's "Misery", about a stalker? Hmmm....
 

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