Taiworld - Ch. 1 - The Fated Encounter with the Devil

[MangaDex]

 

[Zblurth]

Hello thank for your work

So for the feedback the exposition and talking is really unnatural i think more mistery could be better and help with the exposition problem (the people talk for the reader and not because they should/would)

 

[Epicredeemer]

I’m not very good at reviews or properly expressing my opinions, so I’m gonna end up being vague. It’s not a bad concept, but the delivery could use to be refined. It’s rough, but for a first time I’d say it’s ok. Not the first time we’ve seen indie mangaka on this site.
I think I’d like to see more of this in the future.

 

[MistLynx]

Way to much thrown at the reader right on the first chapter with no explanation for it.

 

[dokidoki]

ok so sis got raped and got cum all over her in exchange for the brother getting resurrected into another body.....hella dark start, at least the body of MC is cute now....

 

[Donshotz]

not very good at feedback but uh i think the biggest thing i noticed is the fact the mc changes personality quickly. One second he cares soo much about his sister he would sacrifice his life the next second he seems selfish and just doesnt give a shit about what happens to his sister like when he saw her he cared more about his body or how he didnt care what the guy did to his sister but the fact that he saved him instead aswell as the fact that how its worded he only seems to think he paid a price for this and that he has to deal with it when his sister paid it instead.

 

[thebenefactor]

Um, well... I like the general premise, but I agree that the story lacks refinement. I would have prefered there to be a bit more details about the brother's special move as well as the reason why that New Era group was hunting him. Still, overall, I enjoyed the chapter!

 

[Invader_Retro]

It is interesting but too much happening right now 😶
Got confused 🤔

 

[Tych]

hmm well for indie it has good start wasn't pretentious didn't try and flood us with information and has a interesting story suppose we'll see how it goes from here