Just a couple of notes.
The fahrenheit temperature on page 3 is incorrect, should be ~98.2 (assuming the Celsius temp is correct).
On the next page, "borrow" is not used correctly. The person you are borrowing from "lends" it to you.
I would change it like this:
"That's rad! Can I borrow it later?"
"Okay, but only if you lend me your 'Hodman Nii-san' as well."