I can't do much about it rapidly changing between setting and who has POV in the first few pages, but I went ahead and made some of the dialogue more clear on pages 8, 9, 10, and 13 (40, 41, 42, and 45 in the volume). To be honest, I was worried about some of the dialogue in those pages not being clear when I was working on it, but I just wanted to get it out since I was running behind, knowing I could improve it later.