Toaru Yakedo Shoujo no Hanashi

[MangaDex]

 

[treefroog]

Hello friends, I did not translate this. I forgot to add the pixv link to the raws when I added it , and don't think I can edit the page now, or I am too smol brain to figure out how, so here it is:
Chapter 1
Chapter 2

 

[TrapCard113]

This was really cute, shame it's only 2 chapters.

I really like reading mangas with scarred female protagonists.

 

[treefroog]

Also the author/artist did an illustration of the MC recently:
Here on Pixv

 

[FireCrypt]

@treefroog

Updated the page for you. Reason you can't edit is because you need to have a role of contributor or higher.

 

[treefroog]

@FireCrypt
Thanks friend

 

[NZPIEFACE]

Man, I completely forgot about this.

 

[emMeBi86]

Man, I really hope author-san decides to bring this back...FMC deserves a longer story and some real love, not just a good dream.

 

[danang5]

@emMeBi86 wait the author stop drawing this?aww man

 

[usagiaddict]

cute. would grate cheese onto her.

 

[Mimik]

My complaints:

- The dream sequence thing is just stupid. Both the first one that introduces her to us and the second one that is there for some kind of comedic effect.

- You can argue that she’s a strong person, but with scars like that and what the fire caused her to lose is traumatizing. You can feel that in the first part of chapter 2, but you don’t really feel like she’s particularly affected by it. Even if you’re a hardened badass, those are things that will keep you up at night.

- A little too light-hearted in Chapter 2. To go from a nightmare where she hangs herself out of misery to joking about killing herself from disappointment is a rather sudden and unwelcome tone shift. Something like that takes time and several chapters of character development.

- While the characters themselves are nice, you don’t exactly get a good feel for how what they’re like as individuals. They seem very generic, despite them both being scarred people with morbidly interesting pasts.

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My appraisals:

- The character design. Both of them have great designs, though the main character is obviously the better of the two. I like the design of their

Spoiler

dream child

, I feel like if more effort would be put into it, a great number of unique characters could come out of this.

- The concept. Writing about victims of any tragedy is hard, but the idea of a burn victim as a heroine who is reunited with a childhood friend from before the fire is a naturally good plot. With work, I really believe this could be a masterpiece.

- Realism. She has scar tissue covering the left sides of her face and arm, and would need to take care of this. Scar tissue, especially that on burn victims, can be pretty messed up and difficult to take proper care of. And leaving it open for all to see isn’t exactly the norm for Japanese society. That and the fact that her left eye is obviously damaged, but she shows no sign of being limited by a lack of depth perception, etc. This is all likely due to the short length of the comic, though.

 

[Fireutsie]

Her smile is one you should protect.

 

[ghostkun]

.... hah. A tragi-comedy of sorts? Pretty nice.

 

[Vchla]

What's the original?

 

[Jockpo523]

I think you can add more chapters because the concept Is very interesting. By having dreams, this girl (that obviously went trough a lot of trauma) can descend a little in to madness, to the point where she can no longer trust anything. The first chapter should be somewhere in the last or close to last so you can have a heartwarming finale with boy (her childhood friend) saving her from killing herself. Smething like "you don't have to be alone any more" (or sleep alone anymore 😋). The desings are very good, I like when characters can show a lot of emotions. Hope author continues the story 😁. ( PD. I'm not very good with english, so... Sorry in Advance 😅 also phone didn't help)

 

[mrguest]

i blame katawa for making me like half-toast girl

 

[Itsn]

@Vchla

This is it. The author just put it on pixiv.

For some reason the english translations were almost entirely on hentai sites.

 

[thatsleepyguy]

oh no oh god

 

[KuroeNekumi]

@Itsn usually hentai sites have translations of really wholesome doujins with no reason, beyond maybe that usually doujin relegate themselves to hentai sites. I mean, many of the Chen bkub doujins are on free hentai sites with no reason whatsoever, plus many other really wholesome (and non-sexual) Touhou ones.

 

[MarqFJA87]

Danbooru has a "relationship values progress chart" dedicated to this girl, IIRC. Two versions, actually: one wholesome that has everything go right for her despite her disfigurement, the other super-cruel in that she gets increasingly shunned for her disfigurement until she commits suicide.