thanks for the work so far! here's the more important changes i can suggest:
ch1 p41: your -> you're.
ch2 p4: everything doesn't go well -> nothing goes well / everything goes poorly. ch2 p4: why did i even raise you this far -> why have i raised you until now? ch2 p27: their -> they're. ch2 p34: your -> you're.
ch3 p7: the lymph nodes -> my lymph nodes.
also, has this series been dropped? i'm interested in picking it up, but wouldn't want to overstep of course. thanks again !
man that one 'scout' is sus, i mean it's almost too smooth/i feel like most ppl would be taken aback if they try to recruit someone for a job and them being told 'i'll be dead in a few years'