Really cooked with the art of this one
Some small translation mistakes:
In page 2, the plural of human is definitely not "humen". Nice try, though.
On page 5, the fan club president says, referring to Arata, "you who affection them as a human", but that's not how you use the word affection, it is not a verb. Should be "show affection to them" or something similar, if it can't contextually be translated to "love them as a human".
Nothing huge, but you know, it does take you out of it a bit