I Picked Up a Cosmetic Receipt I Didn't Recognize in My Boyfriend's Room - Oneshot

[MangaDex]

 

[Geejin]

that was fantastic

 

[XenoAshura]

they had us in the first half, not gona lie.

 

[Sunspawn]

Honestly, it was pretty clear what the twist was from the start.

 

[Duribu]

Pseudo yuri is good too

 

[lesseffective]

Honestly, it was pretty clear what the twist was from the start.

I made sure to go in blind, but also is a give away from the tags as well.

 

[moblinsecret]

I figured it'd be something crossdressing
this MTL translation sucks, at the very least you should check the context to make sure you're talking about the right person

 

[MissAnalog]

I figured it'd be something crossdressing
this MTL translation sucks, at the very least you should check the context to make sure you're talking about the right person

That hurts but can you point out the errors?

 

[Sunspawn]

I made sure to go in blind, but also is a give away from the tags as well.

I actually forgot to check the tags, the art style just reminded me of the recent wave of crossdressing shorts, as well as being obviously not dramatic in the first page.

 

[lesseffective]

I actually forgot to check the tags, the art style just reminded me of the recent wave of crossdressing shorts, as well as being obviously not dramatic in the first page.

Oh that's very much the case that the set-up becomes quite identifiable; especially when used in these short formats.

 

[Fractor123]

That good shit

 

[moblinsecret]

That hurts but can you point out the errors?

p1 "I found a department store receipt in my boyfriend's room that I didn't recognize.": "that I didn't recognize" is a dangling modifier, right now it appears to say that she doesn't recognize her boyfriend's room

p2 "I remember you told me not to buy this when I bought too many cosmetic this month, right?": Firstly, 'cosmetics' is always plural when it refers to makeup. More importantly, this sentence is mistranslated; the boyfriend is the one who bought too much makeup, and he told the girlfriend to stop him if he tries to buy more.

p3 "if it actually make you cute, it's hard to get angry.": The word "if" should begin with a capital letter. Also, it should be 'makes', not 'make'.
"I gave up preaching, but for some reason I stopped buying other lipsticks for a while": Another mistranslation, it's the boyfriend who stopped buying other lipsticks. Also, "I gave up preaching" gives the impression that preaching is an activity that the girlfriend regularly did but stopped - 'gave up on' would be preferable. Moreover, "preaching" is one of multiple meanings the original Japanese word 説教 can have, but the one meant in this situation is 'scolding'/'lecturing'.

Overall many of the lines read unnaturally too, in a way nobody would actually speak, as if they were lifted straight from a machine translation.

 

[MissAnalog]

p1 "I found a department store receipt in my boyfriend's room that I didn't recognize.": "that I didn't recognize" is a dangling modifier, right now it appears to say that she doesn't recognize her boyfriend's room

p2 "I remember you told me not to buy this when I bought too many cosmetic this month, right?": Firstly, 'cosmetics' is always plural when it refers to makeup. More importantly, this sentence is mistranslated; the boyfriend is the one who bought too much makeup, and he told the girlfriend to stop him if he tries to buy more.

p3 "if it actually make you cute, it's hard to get angry.": The word "if" should begin with a capital letter. Also, it should be 'makes', not 'make'.
"I gave up preaching, but for some reason I stopped buying other lipsticks for a while": Another mistranslation, it's the boyfriend who stopped buying other lipsticks. Also, "I gave up preaching" gives the impression that preaching is an activity that the girlfriend regularly did but stopped - 'gave up on' would be preferable. Moreover, "preaching" is one of multiple meanings the original Japanese word 説教 can have, but the one meant in this situation is 'scolding'/'lecturing'.

Overall many of the lines read unnaturally too, in a way nobody would actually speak, as if they were lifted straight from a machine translation.

Edit: Nevermind. It's not a mistranslation. My context is right.

But yes, I'll improve better next time.

 

[yuragiruria]

I'd actually smash him ngl

 

[feha]

I made sure to go in blind, but also is a give away from the tags as well.

went in blind in terms of tags, but was a giveaway in terms of the title as well.

 

[VladDracul2]

It's nice to see this particular couple again.

 

[aloysiusks]

Beautiful lips need to be rewarded with a kiss. so just kiss him.

 

[Remilia1998]

Smash both