Juu-hachi Ren - Ch. 2 - Garden

[MangaDex]

 

[UdenEmpati]

The fact that he smokes American Spirits makes me loathe that I like him more.

I can't really say anything because I smoked an even more pretentious brand back before I quit, though, so.

Tomo is indeed a genius though. Already love her character, though the whole trio of friends are great in their own distinct ways.

I do not think sensei will be excited to attend something swarming with teenagers after his mini-tirade about how godawful they are, but I trust in our intrepid heroine's ability to badger him into relenting.



This is delightful. Thank you for TL'ing it for us.

 

[onlyyoshii]

This is delightful. Thank you for TL'ing it for us.

Glad you enjoyed it!

 

[onlyyoshii]

As always, let me know if you notice any errors! I'll be sure to fix it as soon as

 

[UdenEmpati]

As always, let me know if you notice any errors! I'll be sure to fix it as soon as

Only thing I can see--is on p.20:

If you're going with the gender-neutral "they're" for Sensei in the first panel, I would change the following in subsequent panels:

"and has long hair" -> "they have long hair"

"and blonde" -> "they're blonde"

"and has a crazy amount of piercings" -> "and have a crazy amount of piercings"

"Oh! And smokes like crazy too!!" -> "oh! And they smoke like crazy too!!"

Even using they/them as a singular pronoun in English, I believe you would still treat the verbs "is" and "has" as their plural counterparts, "are" and "have". Same with 'smoke' over 'smokes'.

If the pronoun usage is instead changed to 'he" in that initial panel (referring to Sensei), then you can use the singular versions like you currently do.

That's the only thing that really stood out to me, though.

 

[onlyyoshii]

Only thing I can see--is on p.20:

If you're going with the gender-neutral "they're" for Sensei in the first panel, I would change the following in subsequent panels:

"and has long hair" -> "they have long hair"

"and blonde" -> "they're blonde"

"and has a crazy amount of piercings" -> "and have a crazy amount of piercings"

"Oh! And smokes like crazy too!!" -> "oh! And they smoke like crazy too!!"

Even using they/them as a singular pronoun in English, I believe you would still treat the verbs "is" and "has" as their plural counterparts, "are" and "have". Same with 'smoke' over 'smokes'.

If the pronoun usage is instead changed to 'he" in that initial panel (referring to Sensei), then you can use the singular versions like you currently do.

That's the only thing that really stood out to me, though.

I see, I see. I actually interpreted this as Asumi trying to be vague to try and not blow her cover story, but failing at it lol. Since she knows that sensei was a man to begin with.
(Okay too much yap) What I'm trying to say is she's using it more as a "That person" to try and not be specific that it's a man she's talking about
Really helpful though, I'll keep this in mind!
(But let me know if my interpretation is wrong though :3)

 

[UdenEmpati]

I see, I see. I actually interpreted this as Asumi trying to be vague to try and not blow her cover story, but failing at it lol. Since she knows that sensei was a man to begin with.
(Okay too much yap) What I'm trying to say is she's using it more as a "That person" to try and not be specific that it's a man she's talking about
Really helpful though, I'll keep this in mind!
(But let me know if my interpretation is wrong though :3)

Oh yeah no, her using the gender neutral pronoun makes perfect sense in-context. So I agree, your translating with "they/them/they're" is most definitely correct.

I just mean that grammatically, the changes I highlighted would match that use case when she's listing out things about "them".

 

[onlyyoshii]

Oh yeah no, her using the gender neutral pronoun makes perfect sense in-context. So I agree, your translating with "they/them/they're" is most definitely correct.

I just mean that grammatically, the changes I highlighted would match that use case when she's listing out things about "them".

Ooh gotcha! I'll make some adjustments then. Thanks for pointing that out!

 

[onlyyoshii]

Adjustments have been reflected on the actual chapter now. Thanks again! @UdenEmpati

 

[globyglob]

Thank you for the translation!