Recent content by raineight

I've been to Enoshima! Yeah the jellyfish room looks like that. Maybe the first time a manga was set in a place I know.

Based on just the content I wouldn't call this a yuri series... and I'm fine with that, stories don't need to be yuri to interest me. There's like one promise-bite-kiss that suggests this isn't about Hinako and her two youkai foster mommies/aunts.

p6: have fun -> had fun 7: looks life -> looks like

oh what fresh nonsense is this

Dresses might be fanart.

Could just be that Azami didn't think Erica could hold off both Shiori and Miko.

p4: "does human", was this deliberately trying to be memespeak or something? If not, "Why do humans" would be better. Also "what can" -> "what could"

15: "she said... that time", mangled sentence. Maybe move it, "She said that time that she has never been to karaoke." Or "She said last time", if accurate. "would have been new", may not wrong, but "would be" sounds better.

Thanks for the glossary! Good overall. "Her backside of clothes" -- if it's what I think it is, better "Her cape has a Red..." "reuglar" - regular "decipted" - "depicted" "Same kanji is used for Japan's Kanjinized name" - I have no idea what this means "Eight Illusion" - Eighth Illusion

I was going "this guy has a homeroom teacher??? oh right they're supposed to be students, but" it'd be like hearing about Accelerator going to school

"look towards the future and want to build institutions that will outlive them." is a rather whitewashed way of putting "kill or enslave lots of people for profit". And yeah, the average Arab or Persian leader was probably not morally better than the Mongol leaders, and the story starts with...

You're allowed to use more than one page. I've seen chapters with like 3 pages of TL notes, when the TL had a lot to say.

"arsenic trioxide" is a completely out-of-period name...

p8: 'against' is misspelled 3rd panel should be like "the Albion government uses" or "Albion governments use"

"Just put in the house of Commons" That's actually a huge change when the nobles traditionally hold the power.