Please for the love of all that is unholy, run your script through google docs. Like the free google app, please. A majority of your blunders will be caught by the autocorrect on that.
And if possible, get a proofreader.
The art is good. The plot is sort of okay.
I give this 7/10 and its too high a score to be lost to this level of translation.
PS. Your typographer needs a raise. They are doing seriously good work. Too bad they have to work with this typo filled script.