35-sai Dokushin Yamada, Isekai Mura ni Risou no Second House wo Tsukuritai ~Isekai to Genjitsu no Iitokodori Life~ - Vol. 1 Ch. 1.1
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Him exposition dumping his backstory to nobody was really clunky
man wth, looking at page 3 (and somewhat pg1 too)...it looks really weird, especially the lil girl with the wand and stuff. The whole page just looks weirdly "smooth" and inconsistent, just a bunch of stuff in that page just look weird.
I dont wanna assume, but well, yknow, what even is up with that lmao
I dont wanna assume, but well, yknow, what even is up with that lmao
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It's terrible AI upscaling. I mean just look at the cat.
figured lol, I didn't take a good look at the cat but god damn
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Not just you, it also looked...bad to me.
Also, TL/PR could use some work. In general, it's a good idea to get someone else to check your work. Proofreading your own sentences just doesn't work out. Page 2 alone needs some work:
Personally, I'd switch the order around and start with the Having clause.
I forgot the original term for this, but you generally want to keep the words "similar" when laid out like this (3 nouns, verbs, gerunds, adjectives, etc.). Otherwise, just break them apart into 2 different sentences.
Ellipsis here would've worked better, given how you structured your sentence.
Regardless, good luck with TL work and I hope you find good people to work with.
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