J⇔M - Ch. 38 - This girl is definitely not just any gunsmith!

[jpokun]

Much improved, thank you for the translation.

 

[chiliehead]

After giving criticism last time, I have to give props. This reads a lot smoother, even if the issue of plural-s on singular words persists. Another thing to point out is the typesetting. You sometimes touch the margins with some words in speech bubbles and especially text boxes, which makes reading harder and looks bad. At the same time, those text boxes have at least two more lines worth of space left, so you could easily break up the text more without compromising anything. Take both boxes on p. 9, some interpunctuation and better spacing would fit into the boxes and make it way smoother to read:

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p. 8 should be "I met Seira about five years ago ..." with the ... indicating the sentence continues on the next page, then start p. 9 with "...when I was" and then "Oudou Alliance, [line break] after" and simply put in more line breaks in the 2nd box to avoid the third line of "found the" touching the margins of the box, there is ample space.

As for the chapter: J to M really surprises me by the willingness to clear out your established universe by probably soon deleting the third family from the story.

 

[solehuman]

After giving criticism last time, I have to give props. This reads a lot smoother, even if the issue of plural-s on singular words persists. Another thing to point out is the typesetting. You sometimes touch the margins with some words in speech bubbles and especially text boxes, which makes reading harder and looks bad. At the same time, those text boxes have at least two more lines worth of space left, so you could easily break up the text more without compromising anything. Take both boxes on p. 9, some interpunctuation and better spacing would fit into the boxes and make it way smoother to read:

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p. 8 should be "I met Seira about five years ago ..." with the ... indicating the sentence continues on the next page, then start p. 9 with "...when I was" and then "Oudou Alliance, [line break] after" and simply put in more line breaks in the 2nd box to avoid the third line of "found the" touching the margins of the box, there is ample space.

As for the chapter: J to M really surprises me by the willingness to clear out your established universe by probably soon deleting the third family from the story.

Yeah, i don't really give much thoughts on filling up the box, I'll adjust the margin as best as i could but I'd REALLY like to avoid using (-) unless it's necessary to fit inside a tight box/bubble

Sometimes they just won't line up, so i just did they best i could and move on

 

[shelliana]

Classic J!

Kanda has more integrity than the whole Epstein class.

And J is creating new lesbian while trying to be hardboiled.

Seira and Mei were already well on track, J's just accelerating it.

 

[mrboxeater]

everyones so cracked

 

[DumFck]

thanks, translating duo

 

[Fugutron]

How to solve your problems: Kill everybody

 

[Spazz6768]

Thanks for picking this series up!