Comments based on the first chapter:
- sister is weird. She sounds like she thinks women are baby machines. It may be purposeful but it’s certainly uncomfortable.
- the siblingship is weird. “I’m a ten year old boy after all, I wouldn’t be able to contain myself around a lady” Bro that’s your...
The protag is so chatty and dumb. You see a zombie that appeared to look at you? run. It’s approaching you? Shoot AND run. Don’t fucking waste time narrating everything. Are you an idiot? Is your IQ 4?
This is all so cute but when Taka gave up his burger for his big brother..... I’m not okay 😭😭😭
And then him spending time with his dad 🥺
But when did Taka switch from Aniki to Nii-chan?
@BMR13 okay I fully thought you were being an edgelord with no sense of P.T.O. but no it’s really there wtf? I mean I guess the majority of the intended audience wouldn’t be able to read it but wow “slaughter of innocents” right next to a picture of a baby is really... something, huh.
Yeah no I hate the ML. A clingy, possessive, overbearing fuckboi who’s spoiled to boot. The only thing he has going for him is being conventionally attractive. I’d actually spit blood if I have to watch him get together with the FL. HARD PASS.