Overall, very good for a first (or even fifth) try with an MTL. Main thing I noticed was that the line along the lines of "it's fine to injure me, but don't let me hurt you, because I'm a girl" should actually have been something like "it's fine to injure her, but don't do it too much, since she's a girl" because it's Eleanora saying that about her daughter, and... like, "don't let me hurt you"? Who would say that? Especially weird is the "because I'm a girl" bit when taken with that.
At least, that's what it was in the novel. *shrug*