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Chapter 1 seemingly had good backstory, some semblance of motivation and character establishment. It tried to use the isekai-genre, but also set itself apart.
Actually, no it bloody didn't.
The narrative goes in length to justify in a very ambiguous way, as to why the MC is choosing to be a loser, when none of it makes sense -- in fact, even TRYING to create any form of backstory is actively harmful to this story.
Instead of just enjoying this as a story where some random loser is being liked by some random hotties, who he might have a past with, the author chose to focus heavily on creating excuses as to why the MC has to be a doormat, when none of that was needed. It's taking all of the wrong lessons from Korean / Chinese stories, it's distracting from the point of the story: Hot monster tiddies wants his attention. That's literally it.
Instead, the story starts off heavily focusing on war, experiments, big-bad-society, the MC has deep and long regrets about his past, about having to submit to his role as a doormat, how much everyone treats him like a loser....
WHY!? Why would you choose to focus on this shit?
Actually, do you know why?
Because then it's incredibly easy to just fart out a hot girlfriend, that's incredibly attached to him, so she can rescue him.
What a fucking pathetic use for that sort of backstory. To go to such lengths, just to justify something any generic harem does within panels, rather than a full-blown chapter with 40+ pages.
(I don't even know why this bothered me so much, but the entirety of chapter 1 came across as trying to do something new and semi-creative, even by using known tropes, and then it just became wildly apparent of how aggressively derivative and mindless it is. Blegh.)
P.S: Also, the art in chapter 2 tanked like a motherfucker. It feels pretty clear that most of the budget went into the 1st chapter.
Actually, no it bloody didn't.
The narrative goes in length to justify in a very ambiguous way, as to why the MC is choosing to be a loser, when none of it makes sense -- in fact, even TRYING to create any form of backstory is actively harmful to this story.
Instead of just enjoying this as a story where some random loser is being liked by some random hotties, who he might have a past with, the author chose to focus heavily on creating excuses as to why the MC has to be a doormat, when none of that was needed. It's taking all of the wrong lessons from Korean / Chinese stories, it's distracting from the point of the story: Hot monster tiddies wants his attention. That's literally it.
Instead, the story starts off heavily focusing on war, experiments, big-bad-society, the MC has deep and long regrets about his past, about having to submit to his role as a doormat, how much everyone treats him like a loser....
WHY!? Why would you choose to focus on this shit?
Actually, do you know why?
Because then it's incredibly easy to just fart out a hot girlfriend, that's incredibly attached to him, so she can rescue him.
What a fucking pathetic use for that sort of backstory. To go to such lengths, just to justify something any generic harem does within panels, rather than a full-blown chapter with 40+ pages.
(I don't even know why this bothered me so much, but the entirety of chapter 1 came across as trying to do something new and semi-creative, even by using known tropes, and then it just became wildly apparent of how aggressively derivative and mindless it is. Blegh.)
P.S: Also, the art in chapter 2 tanked like a motherfucker. It feels pretty clear that most of the budget went into the 1st chapter.
), because everyone have regrets, have a dreams, a second life.
