Are You a Psychic!? - Oneshot

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Good shit. Reminds me why character-driven stories are great when they don't overstay their welcome.

Like someone already said, I'd like to see more chapters, but I would be perfectly fine if this is all there is to it.
 
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Thanks for the chapter!

Typos and edit suggestions:
  • p6 teaming with delinquents -> teeming with delinquents
  • p13 affects of their hypnosis -> effects of their hypnosis
  • p16 lowlifes -> lowlives
  • p28 first thing's first -> first things first
  • p31 You would only get in the way -> You would only get in the way.
  • p38 As long as I'm on top, -> As long as I stand at the top,
  • p38 It was just a joke prez. -> It was just a joke, prez.
 
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This was good. If done well this could be an actual entire manga. At least I'd read it.
 
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Wouldn't it be a pretty massive deal if he lost his psychic powers this early? His driver/caretaker seemed bizarrely unconcerned by the matter.
 
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Is the family serious about taking over the country at all? Why didn't they tell him about how he would lose his power beforehand?

Anyway, dude is useless now, and he failed his mission, so better transfer school.
 

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