Dex-chan lover
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Oooh now we're getting interesting. The p9rn content was just a reader hook and now we're in the meat and potatoes of the tale. Iver's recovery with the I love yous bit was pretty hamfisted rushed, amongst other things but we needed a mcguffin for better mental health. The meld between "hentai" and story elements with comedy is weird at times but it was the theme the author started with so he had to sprinkle enough before it became an entirely different dish
I do wish they saved the two of them having sex after a time period where it would be more meaningful, to them and us the readers. Right now, its just a plot device
Anyways, I think I can give this tale a passing grade
I do wish they saved the two of them having sex after a time period where it would be more meaningful, to them and us the readers. Right now, its just a plot device
Anyways, I think I can give this tale a passing grade
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