Blade Of No Return - Vol. 1 Ch. 1 - Return of the blade

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Honest opinion. The series seems to be really good so far.

As for the questions on the last page, the latter part having less dialogue seems to fit more as the saying “a picture tells a thousand words” applies.

Also, since you said you aren’t a writer I would suggest not trying to info-dump on the reader and making a huge wall of text as that can be hard to construct.

The backgrounds are fine. More than fine actually, they are really good. In all honesty, this seems really good for a series considering many other series use 3D models or AI for large portions of their works so…. Yours is really good.

I’d advise you to choose one between the Isekai and the original world if you’re planning to stop it early. Although it is appreciated and loved if you put detail and attention on the main character in his original world, if you put too much emphasis on the Main Characters original life then it could very easily overshadow the Isekai.

Note: I am not a writer. So please take all my opinions with a grain of salt
 
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Honest opinion. The series seems to be really good so far.

Note: I am not a writer. So please take all my opinions with a grain of salt

As for the questions on the last page, the latter part having less dialogue seems to fit more as the saying “a picture tells a thousand words” applies.

Also, since you said you aren’t a writer I would suggest not trying to info-dump on the reader and making a huge wall of text as that can be hard to construct.

The backgrounds are fine. More than fine actually, they are really good. In all honesty, this seems really good for a series considering many other series use 3D models or AI for large portions of their works so…. Yours is really good.

I’d advise you to choose one between the Isekai and the original world if you’re planning to stop it early. Although it is appreciated and loved if you put detail and attention on the main character in his original world, if you put too much emphasis on the Main Characters original life then it could very easily overshadow the Isekai.

Note: I am not a writer. So please take all my opinions with a grain of salt
You don't gotta put the note 2 times I understand you just fine but Thank you, this is good feedback, I definitely take the info dump into consideration.
 
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Good work, I am once again looking forwards to what happens next. I only have one critique, and that is the lack of punctuation in some areas of the dialogue. The dialogue itself is fine, but the lack of punctuation in those spots is a bit jarring. Other than that, I'm really interested to see what John Wickian activities are soon to occur.
 
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You don't gotta put the note 2 times I understand you just fine but Thank you, this is good feedback, I definitely take the info dump into consideration.
Shoot I thought I pressed “cut” instead of “copy” haha thanks for telling me
 

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