Centuria - Vol. 1 Ch. 4 - Villagers

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....that whole village really has nothing better to do than show up and watch this one dude all day? Damn, imagine someone coming in and going, "Hey'd I'd just like to stop by for a drink."

"We have 56 barrels of spoiled booze. Drink all of it and we'll consider you worthy. btw, the entire village is going to watch you do it"

"yall really dont have anything better to do?"

"................................................................................... no."

Anyway, no sign of rising conflict. Just an oddly video game like interlude of a chapter. Like, this is seriously like a small quest in an old school RPG to advance the plot. All that's missing is an enemy encounter, like three rats or something.
 
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That chapter really epitomises what's so disappointing about that series. The world is really interesting, the art is great, and the concept for the story is good ; but the delivery is just too amateurish.

I'm sure the author has a great plan for the overall story but the moment to moment writing isn't up to snuff, like the other comment said that whole thing felt like a bad RPG side quest.
 
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That chapter really epitomises what's so disappointing about that series. The world is really interesting, the art is great, and the concept for the story is good ; but the delivery is just too amateurish.

I'm sure the author has a great plan for the overall story but the moment to moment writing isn't up to snuff, like the other comment said that whole thing felt like a bad RPG side quest.
yeah it feels hollow like to you the immortal. too soppy.
 
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Babies don't crawl that young. Dropped.
Babies can crawl starting from ~ 6 months so it’s ok.

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Reading these comments I am glad I’m not the only one weirded out by the whole town just standing there and watching. They are probably super short on entertainment or something considering the time period.
 
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....that whole village really has nothing better to do than show up and watch this one dude all day? Damn, imagine someone coming in and going, "Hey'd I'd just like to stop by for a drink."

"We have 56 barrels of spoiled booze. Drink all of it and we'll consider you worthy. btw, the entire village is going to watch you do it"

"yall really dont have anything better to do?"

"................................................................................... no."

Anyway, no sign of rising conflict. Just an oddly video game like interlude of a chapter. Like, this is seriously like a small quest in an old school RPG to advance the plot. All that's missing is an enemy encounter, like three rats or something.
I mean if it's anything like a rural place, they'd be hard pressed to find an outsider very often. I guess they're just gathering around cuz of curiosity and to gossip as far as I can tell. And yeah it's a quiet and rural place so this is kind of something to kill the boredom
 

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