Danjo-hi 1:39 no Heikou Sekai wa Omoi no Hoka Futsuu (Fan Colored) - Vol. 3 Ch. 152 - Staff Room

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This is cleaned art.


I will take some break. Since I am going to work in Doujin. I need to practice on Anatomy and making hand. Getting reference is big problem. If I can draw it will be very helpful. But that will result in downtime.

Preview of chapter 3.


One thing I find strange in R18 world, why Sou sleeps alone in his room. I mean sleeping beside your lover is one of fantasies.
Perhaps, my perception has changed. I have find things hand-holding and cuddling more exciting than r18 stuffs. If were to write fantasy, I would have Sou cuddling Sumire whole whole night.
 
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I found two small issues:
P6: you need to fix Aya's bubble - parts of the text got erased (or there is a white layer hiding it)
P10: typo in Ikumi's bubble - the "INTO" is missing the "I"

Apart from that, nicely done. Erika having that hair color is interesting. I mean, okay, Kuroki literally means "black tree" but compared to Ikumi her hair didn't appear that dark to me. Still, looks good.
 
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Apart from that, nicely done. Erika having that hair color is interesting. I mean, okay, Kuroki literally means "black tree" but compared to Ikumi her hair didn't appear that dark to me. Still, looks good.
Her hair was gray, so I darkned it. I also feel it will be inaccurate. But for KuroKi black is only seems correct. Haizuka was grey.

Akane, Sumire and Sakua are all flowers. Maple and Mikan are also plant.
 
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Aya Konno is definitely the most innocent girl in the series (so far). She might actually even be considered innocent in our world!

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Her hair was gray, so I darkned it. I also feel it will be inaccurate. But for KuroKi black is only seems correct. Haizuka was grey.

Akane, Sumire and Sakua are all flowers. Maple and Mikan are also plant.
Well looking at how the names were laid out Kuroki is her last name so it isn't like she was named after the colour. I've also met women called Rose with brown hair and despite the trend of Jews having colours as last names (pink, green, blue) their hair usually doesn't match.

What I'm trying to say is the hair colour doesn't need to match the name
 
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What I'm trying to say is the hair colour doesn't need to match the name

It cuts both ways though. The author had already started a pattern of doing that with Kanaria/yellow, Sumire/violet, Miku/red, and so on although the author has backed off on that I think.

Geez, this is difficult.
 

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