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The story is too childish for me. Of course the researchers are cartoonishly evil, of course the MC is acting like he was training his whole life for a day he will reincarnate as an Alien.
"You write what you know."
It's what you get in an industry of young adults writing for an adolescent audience that endlessly demands MORE of the SAME. You get writers whose desire to produce has outpaced their life experiences, and they end up rehashing what little they know (witness the subgenre of manga written about young mangaka struggling to get picked up for publishing). If a writer has only read a hundred derivative variations on isekai reincarnation, that writer is going to write a derivative variation on isekai reincarnation. Or derivative variations of HR Giger's Alien (and I blame WH40K and Starcraft for this as well).
You have to look for authors who have a more diverse background -- movies, books, games, etc they've consumed which shape their ideas and inspirations. And that usually comes with being a few years older (though age is no guarantee of greater depth).
I thought it was funny and ... innocent? Naive? to see how the writer tried to write the bad guys. They spent a battleship's budget to develop the first villain, and no one thought to address social skills and emotional health? Among all the things that required suspension of disbelief, that was the one I got hung up on.
IRL corporate "villains" understand that maintaining top performance requires a foundation of good mental and physical health. But maybe the writer (or audience) feel it's too mundane and boring to have a villain who wakes up early, goes for a run, drinks his/her green healthy smoothie, then shows up cheerfully to work and settles diligently into the perfectly ordinary (to them) task of performing human experimentation. Or maybe the writer doesn't know how to write it, b/c they've never watched/read an action/thriller story like the Bourne Identity. It takes a LOT of experience, effort, and planning to write a story like that.
But to be clear, I think it's great to see them putting out a story at all b/c it's valuable experience. It's like any other kind of art -- the first ones are awful, but each one produced is practice for a better one next time. 10 stories or series from now, the author's work will probably look nothing at all like this one.