Haburare Zukai no Isekai Boukentan - Vol. 1 Ch. 1 - The Rune Pact.

[tondave12345]

Another boohoo I got betrayed I’m gonna do my own edgy thing

 

[Aoitenshi]

into the trash bin this goes...

 

[biologist]

Chat give me da full spoiler

 

[MisterMango]

I didn't find it hard to follow, and filling in backstory with flashbacks is perfectly legitimate.

 

[Loner210]

Even when the artist doesn't involve in writing, it's still bad regardless lol.

 

[cc626]

how tf is this "suggestive" and yeah another isekai slob

 

[Loner210]

Yeah next chapter will bring it to erotica, like every other series of this artist lol.

Spoiler

I actually was hoping it's a misunderstanding, and she was a virgin, but looks like she was in the blind and actually in love with the antagonist, and already done it with him.

 

[Caffiend1113]

Greeeeat, a callous rapist mc and a haphazardly chopped together origin ch, this garbage deserves the axe

 

[legendaryswordsman]

Art and translation is great, everything else is complete trash. It would’ve been mid at best if it wasn’t so disgustingly rushed, but even that’s being somewhat generous. A good manga adaptation from LN means that both new readers and LN readers would be catered to, yet I doubt even the LN readers would’ve been satisfied with the adaptation because of the pacing.

The pacing is a little all over the place, betrayed, why, how did he survive, why is betrayer still not after him, just settling for telling lies

 

[legendaryswordsman]

Ah yes, another isekai mean guy story.

Well to be fair after being stabbed in the back literally and everyone talking behind your back, trust issues and thinking about yourself isn't to surprising

 

[legendaryswordsman]

To be fair the first chapters of an isekai can rightfully be skipped because it's just """"""groundwork"""""" that we've seen time and time again. Guy gets transferred to another world, gets some powers, but then betrayed by a trusted ally, then develops trust issues. Been there, done that, at least like, 5 times already.

But you either tell it all or skip them all. This one sort of tells half of the story then just does a poorly portrayed timeskip. Yeesh.

That's a good way of describing it, I wouldn't mind a skip with just a paragraph explaining the betrayal, but don't go into it if you not going to explain it properly

 

[legendaryswordsman]

For those wondering, it seems the "missing parts" will be shown in later chapters through fragmented flashbacks.

Not the most ideal as it creates a confusion for readers, but I'm willing to stick it out and see where it goes

 

[RogueCitizen64]

It's slop, much like every other betryal story, but I actually like that the MC isn't made out to be a naive nice guy or that the heorine isn't just blindly devoted to him.

 

[MagnaDrake]

I didn't find it hard to follow, and filling in backstory with flashbacks is perfectly legitimate.

The issue is that the story started way before the betrayal. This sets up an expectation that the first chapter would immediately explain why and how it happened.

It didn't, and the fact that it just abruptly cuts to a few weeks/months after with a character we've never seen/heard during the betrayal scene, breaks the storytelling flow badly and caused pacing issues.

It would have been a better choice to do a cold open that portrays the MC, already have been betrayed, doing whatever thing he's doing at the moment, and THEN teases us with a flashback of the betrayal.

Heck, you could probably do it just by chopping up this chapter with no additions whatsoever, and just reorder the panel appearance.

 

[kingalthur]

I feel like there are a whole chapter or two that missed before this

 

[Goldni]

well atleast the mc isnt a pussy