I Dominate a Magical Continent with an Industrial Revolution
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So, i read this up to chapter 7. And ...
It's mostly lazy writting.
I got bored
It's mostly lazy writting.
For example, the lord'son of the land that he visit dont even recognize his home. Everything is simple, bad guys gonna be bad guys, everyone gonna be happy, there's no deapth to any characters. When a problem occurs, it's solved really fast. The "system" doesnt make it less lazy (but's that's a critic of many isekai / reincaranation / "it's a video gamle")
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Started reading, got to the third consecutive scene where a bad guy reaches out to hit a woman and the protagonist grabs his wrist and epically tells him "not on my watch", dropped. Is it too much to ask now that saviour power fantasy is interspliced with more than a smudge of character writing?
I have no idea how did this series got 7.98 rating... The title was interesting and with such rating, I thought it would be decent or at the very least, average. However, turned out I was wrong. I only read until chapter 5 but it still failed to retain my interest, so I'll just start reviewing now.
Let's see what we got.
First, the pacing. We only knew that the MC was a mechanical engineer (though I have some doubt whether the guy was really an engineer OR only studied in engineering major but that's the talk for later). He died, reborn as a cherished son of a grand duke, then given a territory. Now here's the problem: the plot progressed too fast. The setting is in feudal society and they didn't even bother properly introducing the MC's family member, nor the relationship between them, when the setting was in an era where family held importance than individuality. Then he conveniently came across someone useful on the road, heard about casino and immediately went to raid it (what?), confronted the corrupt noble family behind it (how convenient), and secured the funds to start his own industrial revolution. All in 5 short chapter.
Second, the author is very uninspired.
Magic? Well, it's a fantasy world and it's literally in the title so that's okay?
Stats menu? Seriously? Why would they make it into a game? And it's exclusive to the MC too. Why?
Third, shallow and lazy writing.
MC supposedly worked in a company with very low wages for 20 years. How much was this low wage? He claimed to be a mechanical engineer, yet he worked for low wage for 20 years? And from what was shown, he was most likely just an ordinary office worker, and probably not even related to any engineering. I know that not every engineering graduates went to become an engineer but if you haven't known, engineering field is vast advances fast. You don't get to call yourself an engineer after not touching engineering for 20 years, like you don't get to call yourself a doctor when you never touched a stethoscope after you graduated from medical school. Since the MC became a corporate slave for 2 decades, he most likely only has bachelor degree, not master or doctorate. Idk about other fields, but bachelor degree in engineering means you only have the ability to implement, not develop something from scratch. He was just an ordinary guy with practically no engineering knowledge since he probably never touched his textbook or notes since his undergraduate thesis 20 years ago. How did he have so much confidence in creating this "industrial revolution", when he had such low esteem in his previous life? The author tried so hard to make the MC "relatable" to most people but they forgot that ordinary people doesn't have the ability to achieve such lofty goals to begin with, at least not without prior character development.
The author could just make him someone who loved and worked as an engineer but fell from grace and forced to become a corporate slave but he still kept up with engineering. Or maybe the MC could study and rediscovering his knowledge since there's no way someone who hadn't touched his textbook or notes for 20 years could start any engineering project immediately. But no, we only knew the MC was a loser and now that he was reborn, he became a pompous and annoying guy who is so confident in his "industrial revolution" plan.
MC's disregard to the norms of feudal society also painful to read. We are talking about someone who willingly become a corporate slave and emphasized to have never touched a woman in his previous life here. It felt like the author thought of something good for the middle part of the story so they rushed to get there as fast as possible. No inner monologue or planning, just pure "haha I'm son of the grand duke so obey me". The author completely forgot the most integral part of noble society: political intrigues and schemes. Everything just fell down into MC's favor.
For comparison, I just finished reading "The Lady Needs a Break" up to latest chapter before reading this. Same long strip, but vastly different in enjoyment. You could say the MC of that series as "lazy" but to describe her, well, you'd need at least one or two paragraph. What I meant is, you could develop a character around a personality or something, but you could still create "depth". Sure, the MC was lazy, but there were reasons. Sure, MC couldn't just kept her hand to herself despite oathed multiple times that she would "sleep for the rest of the year" multiple times, but there were reasons. Sure, the MC being a prick sometimes, but she thought it throrough instead of being a prick just for the sake of being a prick. All of her actions and thoughts were the product of her past and personality, not just the convenience for progressing the plot. Of course, it could be argued that it was just first 5 chapter so it wasn't a fair comparison, but then it just exposed the author's inability to catch my attention with anything. Anything, at all. I have a low standard so not being able to catch my interest within 5 chapters itself is quite an accomplishment on its own. I dropped multiple series for being dumb, bad, or ridiculous, but I seldom dropped a series because literally nothing caught my interest.
Anyway, I spent too long here. I still have much more to say but I'm aware I'm not exactly good at writing reviews, or my thoughts on something in general so I'll stop here. I just want to say that this series fell short in many ways in the first 5 chapters.
Let's see what we got.
First, the pacing. We only knew that the MC was a mechanical engineer (though I have some doubt whether the guy was really an engineer OR only studied in engineering major but that's the talk for later). He died, reborn as a cherished son of a grand duke, then given a territory. Now here's the problem: the plot progressed too fast. The setting is in feudal society and they didn't even bother properly introducing the MC's family member, nor the relationship between them, when the setting was in an era where family held importance than individuality. Then he conveniently came across someone useful on the road, heard about casino and immediately went to raid it (what?), confronted the corrupt noble family behind it (how convenient), and secured the funds to start his own industrial revolution. All in 5 short chapter.
Second, the author is very uninspired.
Magic? Well, it's a fantasy world and it's literally in the title so that's okay?
Stats menu? Seriously? Why would they make it into a game? And it's exclusive to the MC too. Why?
Third, shallow and lazy writing.
MC supposedly worked in a company with very low wages for 20 years. How much was this low wage? He claimed to be a mechanical engineer, yet he worked for low wage for 20 years? And from what was shown, he was most likely just an ordinary office worker, and probably not even related to any engineering. I know that not every engineering graduates went to become an engineer but if you haven't known, engineering field is vast advances fast. You don't get to call yourself an engineer after not touching engineering for 20 years, like you don't get to call yourself a doctor when you never touched a stethoscope after you graduated from medical school. Since the MC became a corporate slave for 2 decades, he most likely only has bachelor degree, not master or doctorate. Idk about other fields, but bachelor degree in engineering means you only have the ability to implement, not develop something from scratch. He was just an ordinary guy with practically no engineering knowledge since he probably never touched his textbook or notes since his undergraduate thesis 20 years ago. How did he have so much confidence in creating this "industrial revolution", when he had such low esteem in his previous life? The author tried so hard to make the MC "relatable" to most people but they forgot that ordinary people doesn't have the ability to achieve such lofty goals to begin with, at least not without prior character development.
The author could just make him someone who loved and worked as an engineer but fell from grace and forced to become a corporate slave but he still kept up with engineering. Or maybe the MC could study and rediscovering his knowledge since there's no way someone who hadn't touched his textbook or notes for 20 years could start any engineering project immediately. But no, we only knew the MC was a loser and now that he was reborn, he became a pompous and annoying guy who is so confident in his "industrial revolution" plan.
MC's disregard to the norms of feudal society also painful to read. We are talking about someone who willingly become a corporate slave and emphasized to have never touched a woman in his previous life here. It felt like the author thought of something good for the middle part of the story so they rushed to get there as fast as possible. No inner monologue or planning, just pure "haha I'm son of the grand duke so obey me". The author completely forgot the most integral part of noble society: political intrigues and schemes. Everything just fell down into MC's favor.
For comparison, I just finished reading "The Lady Needs a Break" up to latest chapter before reading this. Same long strip, but vastly different in enjoyment. You could say the MC of that series as "lazy" but to describe her, well, you'd need at least one or two paragraph. What I meant is, you could develop a character around a personality or something, but you could still create "depth". Sure, the MC was lazy, but there were reasons. Sure, MC couldn't just kept her hand to herself despite oathed multiple times that she would "sleep for the rest of the year" multiple times, but there were reasons. Sure, the MC being a prick sometimes, but she thought it throrough instead of being a prick just for the sake of being a prick. All of her actions and thoughts were the product of her past and personality, not just the convenience for progressing the plot. Of course, it could be argued that it was just first 5 chapter so it wasn't a fair comparison, but then it just exposed the author's inability to catch my attention with anything. Anything, at all. I have a low standard so not being able to catch my interest within 5 chapters itself is quite an accomplishment on its own. I dropped multiple series for being dumb, bad, or ridiculous, but I seldom dropped a series because literally nothing caught my interest.
Anyway, I spent too long here. I still have much more to say but I'm aware I'm not exactly good at writing reviews, or my thoughts on something in general so I'll stop here. I just want to say that this series fell short in many ways in the first 5 chapters.
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