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Not the most stellar read, but I really does tug at my heart strings seeing orphans suffer. Though, it should still be critiqued.

Honestly it didn’t show enough of the orphans suffering which leads to my 2nd complaint. The orphans trusted the director waaay to fast after the directors personality made a 180, so it heavily lacks properpacing . If she thought like the kids, being nicer to me without a proper explanation, would be more suspicious. She could have easily made a valid point she was saved by the worlds god or saw the error of her ways through a vision at a temple.

Didn’t even try covering it up why her previous ego was so cruel to them. I think the author rushed past the best part of “regret” manhuas is about mending the broken past. Now it’s spiralling into some stupid noble war, like this shouldn’t even be the focus of the story in the first place…
 

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