I Shall Become the Queen - Ch. 20 - The Beaten Boy

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Oh, very nice to see this back up. Thanks for picking it up.
 
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Ya know never thought I’d see this one again I’m glad someone decided to pick this one up even if they are doing it for boredom thanks mate
 
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Definitely good for a first try , the only problems that really stand out to me are both on ph 15 firstly you accidentally put fown instead of down and secondly the same bubble doesn’t really make sense “sit down for a bit while I apply some medicine” would be better, other then those there’s just a few things that could have been worded a bit better but still make sense.
 
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Ah yes, get drunk in this strange guys house, even if he's your classmate you've never spent anytime with him before. Nothing bad could possibly happen, nothing at all. Don't forget you're a women now, even if you can defend yourself, best not to put yourself in a situation where you'd need to.
 

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