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page 12: instead of a TL note saying "I couldn't do any better", why not just keep the actual historical reference Ginko is making? She's referring to Hideyoshi's Great Chugoku Retreat in the Battle of Yamazaki, because the distance they have to walk is really far.
Ginko: "Double the Great Chugoku Retreat..."
Sangetsu: "Chugoku?? What's that?"
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page 21: really clunky phrasing here, but I know those word balloons make it tough. Still, she shouldn't be speaking like Yoda.
btw, check out the last line on the previous page, which gives context. "If there is a problem..." gives the wrong impression. She's not asking for approval from Sangetsu and assuaging his worries like "if there's a problem, I'll solve it". No, she's admitting that there's one teeny, tiny problem with her worldview - there might not even be anything that can kill her! so perhaps "There's just one problem..." might be better here.
Then on the following page, "Does this world even have anything that can cut down a samurai like me?" would be one way to put it. Good luck cramming that into those balloons, though.
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Thanks for the TL, just wanted to give some tips on the rough parts I noticed.
Ginko: "Double the Great Chugoku Retreat..."
Sangetsu: "Chugoku?? What's that?"
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page 21: really clunky phrasing here, but I know those word balloons make it tough. Still, she shouldn't be speaking like Yoda.
btw, check out the last line on the previous page, which gives context. "If there is a problem..." gives the wrong impression. She's not asking for approval from Sangetsu and assuaging his worries like "if there's a problem, I'll solve it". No, she's admitting that there's one teeny, tiny problem with her worldview - there might not even be anything that can kill her! so perhaps "There's just one problem..." might be better here.
Then on the following page, "Does this world even have anything that can cut down a samurai like me?" would be one way to put it. Good luck cramming that into those balloons, though.
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Thanks for the TL, just wanted to give some tips on the rough parts I noticed.
