Kanade ru Lily - Oneshot

[MangaDex]

 

[Nicisbacktozeldagaming]

That was cute. ☺️

 

[20471120]

That was cute. ☺️

really glad u liked it

 

[totalfish]

the text get cut off rather abruptly sometimes. it makes the manga hard to follow. I was confused a decent chunk of time so I ended up glazing over the text cause I wasn't able to understand what was going on. it made the scene where the fan is getting mad at the idols confusing cause I wasn't sure what lily said in return.

 

[20471120]

the text get cut off rather abruptly sometimes. it makes the manga hard to follow. I was confused a decent chunk of time so I ended up glazing over the text cause I wasn't able to understand what was going on. it made the scene where the fan is getting mad at the idols confusing cause I wasn't sure what lily said in return.

i really appreciate the feedback. thank u

 

[CyberneticSusurrus]

Page 5 is one of the examples of sentences being cut short for no apparent reason.
"It's gotten to the point where fans are actually" what?

Edit: And again on Page 7, a sentence cut off.
Which I can only assume persists throughout, given the text is being consistently confined to the bubbles.

You should actually proofread all the way through before you publish.
(Reading in reverse order - from the last panel on the last page, backwards to the first - can make it easier to spot issues.)