Thank you for the chapter.
Also, don't worry about the dialect. If this were the official translation, and you were actually paid for the work, we could talk about it. But even then complaining would be unfair. Translation is not a well-paid job - especially when we're talking about fiction. The companies know we are doing a labour of love, AND -they- love to use the term AI to lower rates. (Yes, I am in the business.)
Also, you can always improve texts just a tad.
So the first thing you nneed to learn is to quit when it's
good enough.
Otherwise, you will never finish a job on time, and you won't make enough money to survive off translation.
Harsh, but true. If you do this as a hobby, you can put in more time and work, but otherwise you need to pace yourself.
That said, it's FUN!!!
So thank you again!