It's good, i like it,
@UnknownSaint111 is right, it is missing something, but i feel that it's more due to the lack of any sort of plotline to follow after the (brief as hell) backstory, this story (at least to me) seems to have been written as 1 in a series. but sadly it was either axed at the start or the writer/artist didn't bother doing any more. or it could just be a pilot, either way, it's a great story.